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Originally Posted by waterbottle99
at the start of the story, you said you was at your gf's house and it was her maid.
now you say it is your maid at your house and you even know her name.
care to explain?
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nope dont care to explain...
but since the same question might go through some of the other reader's minds...here it is...i dont recall saying its my house....but just that its the house.....
an important part of a story to me...is dynamics rather than a static storyline....if i were to state all the facts at the beginning of a story...its boring....so as the story progressed and the interactions continued...the story was more wound around the two people...and its very clearly a master slave situation....clearly making me the master and her my servant....
as for her name....i never said i didnt know it...i just built up the story...so that at the climax of the story....the most important part of the conversation starts with me screaming her name....giving personality to a character that was till then only a faceless nameless maid....
there are plot devices....and this is just a story....if you are here to critique...there are tons of other stories that might pique ur interest with a more statement of fact storytelling method....i suggest you dont spoil it for the rest of the readers here.....i dont care to continue this conversation so please dont take the trouble to reply